TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Friendship is an inspired from loyalty, warmth, safety and love. Really friendship is the best relationship to be between people. I think that lonely human is looks like body without soul.Indeed, making a real friends is extremely hard and it isn't easy to have a loyal person. In order to that, i think that having a small number of friends for a long time is the real meaning of truly friendship.

On our life stages, even if at the time of childhood, teenagers and after being graduate. we are supposed to meet new people and make a lot of relationships with them as they may be our classmates, roommates, team members, neighbors and workmates. All of those relationships are really important and make everybody feels happy and comfortable. But I think the real happiness doesn't occur until we got a real friend who stay with us until the rest of our life.

For instance, At the time of my childhood when I entered the kindergarten I met my friend Manar; when I looked at her face and focus in her eyes really I felt very exciting. Me and Manar were good friends, we participated at the same hobbies and thinking. At the followed educational stages, we had the chance for being at the same class and Manar being my best friend. Today we celebrate the 20th anniversary of being true friends. She isn't my friend but she is more than my sister. I remembered that she dressed me and made my make up in my wedding day. I named my daughter Manar also!! do you imagine that??!!.

In conclusion, Making a real friend that stay with you forever is the best achievement you can have in your life.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, really, so, for instance, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55555555556 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.671860899 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565972222222 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.50037457 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188583999229 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620255544497 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489003937586 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121588856006 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272720953574 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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