TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

There are myriad factors or considerations which take into that people today spend less time doing things they should do and spend too much time spend on personal enjoyment, doing things like to do. As far as I concerned according to the following reasons and from my personal experiences, I am of the conviction that people today give too much time on there personal enjoyment spend time in thinks they like to do and forget important things they need to do. Someone can concisely wight the pros and cons of each. The reason for my conviction will be explored in the following essay.
The first exquisite reason which gives adherences to my viewpoint with the example is in today's busy life it is hard to find free time and when people get their free time they like to spend there time for personal enjoyment, as they think this the only time they get in a day this became our mentality that we should not get more time for personal enjoyment and by bit by bit people waist there whole time in personal enjoyment my experience excellent example of this after my day job I have to spend my time with family and got very little time for me so when getting it I spend my time hanging around with friend on the other hand If I think this way I spend every day my time with friend whereas I can use that for learning new thing which can help me to get promotion in my job.
Apart from the fact mention above, one should consider another sublet reason which meticulously pertaining to obtain huge experience. The noteworthy refreshing statistic revealed by a recent social research in which majority of people agree with the fact that even they know that they have done more important things they end up spending their time in thinks they like to do as these things easier to do, to shade more light in this issue according to the research done by Delhi University is that because of social network people nowadays people end up their time in things they don't need to do for example people spend their time to go on holiday or go to some special place for the only reason is show other people they having fun in their life.
Admittedly, someone can justification on another side by in today busy life people get very little time for their self so in that time they need to spend on things to like as this is a way to make their life refreshing if people only do work they or not do enjoyment this can lead them to get bored or get fursteted by work but I still affirm to the fact that people too much focus on having enjoyment in their life and forget things they need to do.
In summary, by all affirmation above one should consider that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment- doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'by bit'.
Suggestion: by bit more time for personal enjoyment and by bit by bit people waist there whole time in person...
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent social research'.
Suggestion: recent social research
...worthy refreshing statistic revealed by a recent social research in which majority of people agree with ...
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that research in which majority of people agree with the fact that even they know that they have done more...
Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...people end up their time in things they dont need to do for example people spend the...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, whereas, apart from, for example, i think, in summary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42829076621 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27109604953 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.381139489194 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 20.1344086022 278% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 240.358733953 48.9658058833 491% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 250.444444444 100.406767564 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.5555555556 20.6045352989 274% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.505835125443 0.236089414692 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.284412845661 0.076458572812 372% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.227380528907 0.0737576698707 308% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.400824241601 0.150856017488 266% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178815363099 0.0645574589148 277% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.7 11.7677419355 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 31.56 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 10.1575268817 224% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.4 10.0537634409 243% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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