TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

In 21st century, people get so busy in their personal routine in extra curriculum that may b they ought to not engage, but they feel so relax by access to that particular activities. Human soul is basically a very complex type, hence, they also really do not know what are people going to do in life? what is necessary for them? what will be the consequences of their bit of enjoyment. Now days, I see, many of the human beings just passing time by wasting it on that things, which may b not compulsory, but still they are continuously engaging themselves. Likewise: active whole day in social websites, going to restaurant unnecessary and take extra session of trivial classes for example: dance or computer class.

First, to begin with my above reason, mainly our youngsters is extremely busy in social media that they are not understanding the actual focus of interest, every next child is just coping the other, either on Instagram or Facebook sites. A child even is not noticing the purpose behind this, just not to make his self lose in front of other young generation, he also do the exactly the same.

Secondly, as continuing my points, today, there is no value of money because it seems like people have a lot of income that they are ready to spend it on extra hang outs, to illustrate: making lunch or dinner plans with friends, do unimportant window shopping as well as they do not have any idea of what even they are doing, just time wasting.

Lastly, I accept that health is the main source of human body, people should invest on this section, but many of the people take dance and yoga classes for the sake of enjoyment, because their friends is also taking the same class, so it does not mean it is must for you, why? you just following the person, not your personal thoughts.

To summarize, I think, yes it is very obvious that human body does not understand that this is not a matter of fact, you should follow your commands in a right way rather than to spend time and money at things, which are even not beneficial for you. The great saying; "time is money". Thus both are the precious things, which never come again and again.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...ow what are people going to do in life? what is necessary for them? what will be the...
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Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...do in life? what is necessary for them? what will be the consequences of their bit o...
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Line 1, column 558, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
...y are continuously engaging themselves. Likewise: active whole day in social websites, g...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...xtremely busy in social media that they are not understanding the actual focus of interest, every nex...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...ront of other young generation, he also do the exactly the same. Secondly, as c...
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Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the exactly the'. Did you mean 'exactly the'?
Suggestion: exactly the
...t of other young generation, he also do the exactly the same. Secondly, as continuing my poi...
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Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
... does not mean it is must for you, why? you just following the person, not your per...
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Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f fact, you should follow your commands in a right way rather than to spend time and money at ...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...reat saying; 'time is money'. Thus both are the precious things, which nev...
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Line 9, column 365, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ings, which never come again and again.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, likewise, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for example, i think, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40219482242 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565891472868 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.0168515073 48.9658058833 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.285714286 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6428571429 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247294193189 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717078541949 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803880994136 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129528501434 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666216258509 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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