TOEFL T P O 12 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture both about an original canvas of the English novelist, Jane Austen. The author of the passage believes that no wonder, she was not so much known but demonstrate her writing skills very well and the only evidence about her is the drawing of Jane by her sister. The lecturer casts doubt on the claim made in the article. He mentions that neither, it is a precise nor, an exact prof for the painting, which target by in the reading.

First of all, the article points out that it is shown after her death, her family, whose gave permit for the cutest young lady sketch, made by her sibling, to defining her features. This point is challenges by the lecturer. He argues that the painting is revolves around the late century, the time is about after the death of Jane, approximately 70 years.

Secondly, the passage contends that face is very close to the one of the portrait of Cassandra's wants to justify her. This argument rebuts by the teacher. He explain that there is a lot of bundle of young girls; including sisters and niece in to the family, so this point is also indicates lacking of the surity of her picture.

Finally, the article states that the sketch styled about a teenager girl, who share a common features of the known artist of that era. The professor, on the other hand, posits that cloth on to which the picture is drawn is basically by the one of man, (stamp on the back side of the picture), who sailed this type of piece in London, that time, she was 27 years old women. So the point comes how is the teenager girl suddenly become women at the same time.

Hence, both the author and the professor made so many claims and do not accepting to each other views.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r is the drawing of Jane by her sister. The lecturer casts doubt on the claim made ...
^^^
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'explains'.
Suggestion: explains
...This argument rebuts by the teacher. He explain that there is a lot of bundle of young ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun bundle seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of bundles'.
Suggestion: a lot of bundles
...y the teacher. He explain that there is a lot of bundle of young girls; including sisters and n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e of piece in London, that time, she was 27 years old women. So the point comes h...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 313.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49520766773 5.08290768461 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2085899416 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555910543131 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5707521605 49.2860985944 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06452816374 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257770383597 0.272083759551 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071439474769 0.0996497079465 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567466934657 0.0662205650399 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116083241126 0.162205337803 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658725732152 0.0443174109184 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.2367328918 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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