TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

In my opinion, I tend to believe that people may waste a valuable time on entertainment issues more rather than achieving the specific missions that they should do. I feel this way for two main reasons and I will elaborate on my view in the following essay.
First of all, some people could be affected by pressure. The accumulation of their duties could make them do a procrastinating response. The procrastinating method means that they try to escape from their massive tasks by postponing these tasks and doing their fun stuff instead. For example, my cousin failed in his first year of medical college in Syria, because, he was spending a lot of time on playing PlayStation with his fellow instead of studying his tough curriculum. He could not commit to studying regularly, and he kept postponing his tests until he failed.
Secondly, nowadays there are a lot of recreations activities. The modern technology offers tremendous experiences in video games, 3D technic and so on. These activities could be an addict readily, since everyone has a smartphone, and laptop computer, So, people could tend to use these stuff extremely to have enjoyment because these material are spread all over around us. they may have difficulty to resist participating in these games since they easy to use. As a result, they struggle to do their real tasks seriously.
To sum up, I strongly believe that people nowadays focus more on enjoyment activity more than their tasks that they should do. Because they may be under tough circumstances and try to avoid the serious thinking by doing fun stuff. In addition, they may be addicted to modern facilities that offer games all over around us which are easy to reach and use.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90344827586 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73547183921 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572413793103 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8991533212 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262691575906 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926774699035 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869273762198 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172907069847 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496773388188 0.0645574589148 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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