Students should learn what is needed for their life.Some people believe that student should learn about concepts and ideas rather than facts. On the other hand, some think the opposite, that facts and serious life is more important than ideas and concepts and dreams that are taught in school. I strongly believe that we should involve our children in serious life, the sooner the better. I have following reasons to support my idea.
First of all, when we are at school we are so little that we can not decide for our selves. So the school has to give good program to us and organize us well. When I was in my school in Iran unfortunately foreign language was not in our program at all. Elementary school was done without any English as English become international language nowadays. So I had dreams about foreign countries such as USA like heaven. I feel behind the world now. There was no Cartoon in English or Suboprah that I can learn English from.
Moreover, maths and chemistry are taught to school children but how much are they going to use is the question. Here in North America I heard when they are going to Art they do not need to know any mathematics so the kids are very weak in mathematics in comparison with middle east countries. I wasted my time in Iran by being a good student in maths and chemistry that no where in the world is seen. Calculation with Persian numbers, knowing chemistry formula by heart in Farsi does not count any other place other than Iran. My major which is computer programming in Iran is so competitive too.
Furthermore, real life is different from what we learnt in school we have to learn it as life goes on. The most important thing to know that I recently became to know is how to make money. When we are at school age we are educated to work and make money for better life.
All in all, I strongly agree with the idea that we need to teach more serious and real thing to kids in school. So that when they come to real world they do not shock with reality and all their dreams become unreal.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...uld learn what is needed for their life.Some people believe that student should lear...
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...ood program to us and organize us well. When I was in my school in Iran unfortunatel...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
...ood student in maths and chemistry that no where in the world is seen. Calculation...
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...ermore, real life is different from what we learnt in school we have to learn it ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, as to, i feel, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46276595745 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30494749039 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484042553191 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1326610265 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9047619048 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9047619048 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150606405308 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467512721164 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587991091164 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900391470919 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730476404408 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
Rates: 63.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.