TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The ability of creativity plays an important role in teaching and training children. Therefore, the issue of whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past draws different ideas from many people. Some people think that children will reduce their capacities in creative things because of using technology. Some people would not agree with this statement. In my point of view, I believe that with the help of technology, children become more active and technology supports children to learn more effectively. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, technology is an implement that encourages children to discover many new things. It is no doubt that children like to imitate what they have seen and try to make something new. My nephew is a compelling example of this case. My nephew is ten year old now. He likes to watch the program of making robot. He not only watched this program, he applied and learned how to do it step by step. As a result, last month he could make a robot that was able to move and carry something look like the robot that he has seen on television. In this case, if my nephew did not watch and use technology how he could make his own robot. Moreover, we are living in very fast developing world. There are a lot of social networks and websites to learn and enjoy reading books. Most of them are created by young children.
Another benefit of using technology is to help children handle puzzle problems smartly. We all know that children enjoy playing games. Playing games is a big question and it sometimes harms to children if they are addicted to it. However, if their parents know how to help and teach them, playing games will help children to become more active and smarter. To be more specific, my niece is seven year old now, she loves playing a game named "finding gold". This game helps her to react quickly and try to find solution fast and exactly. Her parents told me that sine they allowed her played this game, she could learn mathematics more effectively.
In conclusion, people have different perspectives about the concept of whether children become less creative than they were in the past. In my opinion, I strongly support the idea that using technology helps children to become more active and smarter.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75245098039 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49063871124 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522058823529 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4036856203 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5769230769 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6923076923 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207520061599 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590601382103 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630151866024 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154554236577 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938303098671 0.0645574589148 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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