Everyone has mixed feelings about technology, whether it is be going against technology, or using technology as an advantage. I disagree that technology makes children less creative. I have two reasons for this: technology has things like coding or photoshop, and that some video games help you to create objects for the battle.
Technology has many things that help you use your mind. One of those things is photoshop. This helps you use your artistic side to change things or even just to create things you enjoy. It takes a lot of work to master photoshop. The other is coding, this helps you use your mind even more. It is just like learning a new language. This helps you become more creative, because you can create new codes which uses a lot of creativity.
My second reason is that some videos games improve creativity. First of all, there are a couple of games where you have to build objects. One example is a game where you create different robots, then go out into a combat. Although some games require no thinking at all, lots of games may have other things that make you use your head to win.
Technology can make people get angry or even less intelligent, but some parts of technology help improve your mind. Two of these are things such as coding, or photoshop, and another are video games that make you create things using your head or even games that require you to make strategies. Technology is the future, and although some parts of it aren't great, some help us in many different ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...eelings about technology, whether it is be going against technology, or using tech...
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Line 7, column 350, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...e future, and although some parts of it arent great, some help us in many different w...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...arts of it arent great, some help us in many different ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, then, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1252.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67164179104 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36709547998 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 212.727598566 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485074626866 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 398.7 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8831093635 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6470588235 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7647058824 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52941176471 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16050974633 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671763746757 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527449988403 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112723627436 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232605697972 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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