TPO-09 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

development of technology brought many ease and facilities and let Children to be more active than before.
I personally disagree with the view that technology made Children less active than previous generation.
Although technology has some considerable drawback beside its advantages.
The following reasons prove my assertation:

Firstly ,Nowadays patents has busy schedule and can not spend more time with their children,therefor technology is good mean of spending time and learning new skills.
For instance ; my younger brother was very interested in using computer different programms when he was only 10 years old he was playing different game in computer, he attended many different computer software and hardware course and now he has decided to enhance his knowledge by studying Computer science.
Secondly, beside its advantages technology has some considerable drawbacks for example, my small brother was addicted with mobile game later on he found eye sight problem and now doctor prescribed him glasses.
To conclude,keeping in view above reasons technology let Children to be active but it needs patents make good planning for their children use.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Development
development of technology brought many ease and fac...
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Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n less active than previous generation. Although technology has some considerable drawba...
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Line 6, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reasons prove my assertation: Firstly ,Nowadays patents has busy schedule and c...
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Line 6, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , therefor
... not spend more time with their children,therefor technology is good mean of spending tim...
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Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed in using computer different programms when he was only 10 years old he was pla...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...different game in computer, he attended many different computer software and hardware course ...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt computer software and hardware course and now he has decided to enhance his kn...
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Line 8, column 154, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
...cted with mobile game later on he found eye sight problem and now doctor prescribed him g...
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Line 9, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , keeping
...or prescribed him glasses. To conclude,keeping in view above reasons technology let Ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 52.1666666667 35% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 999.0 1977.66487455 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 177.0 407.700716846 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64406779661 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00607998129 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 212.727598566 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.661016949153 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 618.680645161 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.8058777513 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.714285714 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154967184809 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898573210898 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724978425412 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864492184461 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685249507698 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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