TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Playing computer games is a two dimensional issue which has different disadvantages and a little advantages Which is also negligible against so many dangerous results. In total in my opinion for children playing computer games should be banned.
First, most but not all computer games are addictive. When a person specially children play them enjoyable issue on those game such as colorful scene, lovely idol who player should help them to success, warm environment in the game cause player addict them and try to spend more and more time for. If a student who should spend more time on studying addict to these games, he wont success in the future.
Second, students specially who study hard and concentrate on complex topic need recharge stress and press by playing computer games. They will relax and recharge themselves. On the other hand their mind abilities improve by playing computers games. Most of these games are so complex with hard stages which forced students to think, analysis and results. All these are very important mind abilities, required for real life successful.
Last, another computer games disadvantage are emotional disorders. For example some boys games are very aggressive which cause player's sense of violence strengthened or some other games content bad scenes such as kissing, killing good people, killing our boss, participating in bad parties, tricking our parent, drinking liquor, having immoral behavior. On the other hand children and students and totally all people by spending more time on playing will be farther and farther of human communities specially their family. This has a bad effect on their emotional relation and finally they will be cold heart with a poor emotional intelligence.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ame such as colorful scene, lovely idol who player should help them to success, warm envir...
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...e games, he wont success in the future. Second, students specially who study har...
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...x with hard stages which forced students to think, analysis and results. All thes...
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...nd finally they will be cold heart with a poor emotional intelligence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24100719424 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5849697742 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579136690647 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3331575416 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.071428571 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212382199332 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784159407996 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594544814319 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139817839742 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389740596053 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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