TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

For some teenagers and young adults, the video game is their part of life. Even though there are some arguments on whether the video game is allowed to children or not, I believe the pros of playing it outweigh the cons for the following reasons.

Above all, the video games sustain the ability to work with the keyboard. Most video games require the players to have knowledge about the position of letters which advocate the ability to write fast on the computer. Moreover, some children learn how to code to hack a game. I think many genius coders like Mark Zuckerberg will be born in the future.

Furthermore, through the online games, children learn a foreign language to connect with the players around the world. Online games allow the single player to play with others in purpose to not bore them which help both of them to learn English better. For example, the basis of amazing English knowledge of my classmate which helps him to got high score on TOEFL is a game called counter. Not only that example, but there are also many others in the world.

Finally, the one advantage of a video game is to release the stress of this stressful society. Many get depressed because of the many issues facing with them such as traffic and when they play video games, they do forget about the real life for a little amount of time. I also sometimes play games to get out of the situation I am in, it really helps me to become calm and during the game, I fell happiness because there is no stress in my head.

All in all, even though some people see computer game as a distraction, there are many advantages to it. From my point of view, the purpose of the video games is the same as the other technologies to make life easier and convenient.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'outweighs'?
Suggestion: outweighs
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Suggestion: Many gets
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, for example, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53627760252 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25434881658 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536277602524 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2745323192 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182000696922 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607298775635 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457644403996 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100114916104 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263514152121 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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