TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Todays the Internet has an important role in our lives. It has a lot of advantages such as in communication, in business, and even in shopping. Some people believe that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information; others think access to so much information creates problems. I strongly believe that the Internet provides us with a lot of valuable information for two major reasons that are elaborates in the following paragraphs.
First reason is that it saves our time. When we want to find a lot of useful information, the best way is to use the Internet. The Internet is the only way to find huge information. For example, one time I have to work in a tourist company. In other words, I must learn a lot about some different cultures. So I need to find this information. At the beginning I went to library but I realized that it took long time to read the books. In fact I do not want to read all of book. I need to read some parts of every books. I decided to use the internet. It was very incredible. Because I find a lot of information that was classified as I wanted. I learned all of things that I need. It took only five days too read what I required to learn. As you can see, if I read the books, It could take more than five days.
Second, it is very useful in business. In business, the key of successful is making a good and quick decision. To make a good and quick decision a lot of information needs. For example, last summer I worked in a computer company and we wanted to create a machine that was applicable in agriculture fields. We required to know how many people would attend to buy this machine. I had good idea for this. I said that it is better to advertise on the internet to determine how many people want to buy it. After we have done that, we realized that about more than ten thousand people would attend to buy it. Therefor, we started on creating it confidently.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the internet provides us with a lot of valuable information. Not only will it save our time but also It is very useful in business. It is recommended that people should find information that they need on the internet.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...First reason is that it saves our time. when we want to find a lot of usful informat...
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Line 2, column 701, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to read'?
Suggestion: to read
...gs that I need. It tooks only five days too read what I required to learn. As you can se...
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Line 3, column 320, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'knowing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: knowing
...able in agriculture fields. We required to know how many people would attend to buy thi...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'in fact', 'such as', 'in other words', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.184444444444 0.229887763892 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.186666666667 0.158761421928 118% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0733333333333 0.0866891130778 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0333333333333 0.046263068375 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102222222222 0.0685040099705 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128888888889 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0111111111111 0.0351676179071 32% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.65490777321 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0466666666667 0.0309702414327 151% => OK
Particles: 0.00222222222222 0.00188951952338 118% => OK
Determiners: 0.0866666666667 0.0887237588012 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0155555555556 0.0209618222197 74% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155555555556 0.0139019557991 112% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2164.0 2387.08602151 91% => OK
No of words: 405.0 408.028673835 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34320987654 5.86048508987 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.269135802469 0.338922669872 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.158024691358 0.174417080927 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0938271604938 0.112833075102 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65490777321 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461728395062 0.524397521467 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.5869094688 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6684587814 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.064516129 20.5533526081 64% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8760798836 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.8064516129 120.699889404 58% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.064516129 20.5533526081 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.354838709677 0.644075263715 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 33.064516129 45.7405998639 72% => OK
Elegance: 1.00689655172 1.45489161554 69% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351266643796 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119849708605 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.128196923251 0.0752933317313 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.39997072658 0.497263757937 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142602588143 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110260835309 0.114077575197 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994895516987 0.0781384742642 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.375278222142 0.336927656856 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0379311718978 0.067059652881 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250138663133 0.210909579961 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544614301875 0.0618886996521 88% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.91756272401 285% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 11.0 2.75985663082 399% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 26.0 13.6433691756 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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