TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Development is a continuous process. Moreover, with the advent of technology, life has changed dramatically in several aspects. However, there is always a controversy among the people regarding the pros and cons of Internet, while some people think that internet provides a lot of valuable information others think that access to much information creates problem. Yet, I strongly believe that Internet is a boon to the mankind. The following essay describes the reasons for holding my opinion.

First and foremost, in this busy and fast moving world it is very difficult to know what is happening in the next door. whereas, internet provides the up to date information around the world with in no time. It is the fastest means of mass communications through social platforms like facebook, and twitter etc.,. Moreover, the information can be accessed irrespective of time like the past information. For example, Although, we get a lot of information like current updates of government from the television, the disadvantage is that we can only watch what is telecasted, whereas in the internet we could find any topic of interest and know the valuable information.

Secondly, students can easily access the internet for their academic purposes, whereas it is more time consuming to search the same information in a library. For example, people use internet for doing their research, and studying etc.,. Besides this, online classes can be taken on internet rather going to the class. Additionally, the internet is an important means of entertainment. For instance, people watch movies, songs, and play games etc.,

Therefore, to sum up I undoudtedly say that internet provides people with a lot of valuable information.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whereas
...now what is happening in the next door. whereas, internet provides the up to date infor...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...now what is happening in the next door. whereas, internet provides the up to date infor...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...latforms like facebook, and twitter etc.,. Moreover, the information can be access...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
... doing their research, and studying etc.,. Besides this, online classes can be tak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 275.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30545454545 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9861254921 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2463964718 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289507695132 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837330974285 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954319486504 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208249666554 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939440659798 0.0645574589148 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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