Currently we are living in digital world, where technology has huge impact on both our personal and professional life. Due to technology, many jobs has obsoleted, while new kind of jobs are offers for new generation with new skills. There is a controversy among different people about whether to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects of to specialize in one specific subject. I am of the opinion that people should become specialize in one area mainly for technology impact in job market and scarcity of specialize professional.
To begin with, many jobs that do not require deep or specialize knowledge such as clerk or deliveryman will soon be replaced with technology such as automation and artificial intelligent. In repetition or document tasks, employer prefer technology to people because technology can work 24 hours and more accurate than human. As a result, in order to survive in job market today, people need to be specialize in one area. You can take the example of jobs in my company. My company replaced deliveryman with drones to deliver goods to consumer. Drones can work 24hours, and always-on time. On the other hand, new job title created such as drone technician. Therefore, while some broad knowledge job will soon be obsoleted, many companies have more demand for specialize knowledge jobs.
Furthermore, although technology advances provide human with comfort and easier life, pollution and global warming has become major issue of humankind. These issues cannot solve easily by rule or government regulation. Our world need specialize professional in this scare field such as climate change to help work on the most difficult problem that human ever faced. However, less than 30% of new graduate choose STEM field as their major and even less pursue subject such as climate change. As a result, global warming issue become bigger while people who work on become less and less. I believe that we need to encourage new generation on the issue human currently faced and how important for these specialize subject will help our world.
In conclusion, study many academic subjects can be advantage several decades ago. Nowadays, specialize in one specific subject is more important due to current trend changes in job market and scarcity in of specialize professional.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to stem'
Suggestion: To stem
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17426273458 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73115750154 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514745308311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7930584399 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20517155574 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662339893658 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826627502369 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146523858464 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591694959738 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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