Some people adopts the idea that people should study focus on only one subject than broaden their knowledge of many subject because deep knowledge is the most powerful tool for that person to foster their career. However, I find myself would be with this notion for the following reasons.
First and foremost, general knowledge is more powerful weapon for a person than deep knowledge. In fact, most of the leaders in big companies often have broad understanding in different areas. To be more specific, a CEO of a big company have to both understand technology of his product and the market that he is working on to bring out right business strategies for his company. On the contrary, specialize employees just need deep understanding of the subjects that they are working on. Unfortunately, because of the lack of other subjects knowledge, a specialize worker cannot reach high position in their life-work easily. Therefore, what can be seen from this comparison is having knowledge in many subjects creates advantage for people in their careers. Indeed, people should enlarge their learning.
Furthermore, academic knowledges also has a big influence on our social skills. For example, a person who is just good at math cannot have an attractive and interesting conversation about literature; therefore, he will have a lack of confident while talking about a great novel. This may seem to be fine, but actually it limit his circle of friends because there will be people that will not be interested in him. In contrast, general knowledge allow a person to join many conversation topics; he may not talk about it charmly but confidently. This enable him to be an alluring person in most of people mind and give him great relationship with people.
Ultimately, I believe that people should broaden their knowledge in many subjects areas; general understanding help them in developing their careers and sharpening their social skills. Indeed, successful extroverts often have broad knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun subject seems to be countable; consider using: 'many subjects'.
Suggestion: many subjects
...subject than broaden their knowledge of many subject because deep knowledge is the most powe...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...f the lack of other subjects knowledge, a specialize worker cannot reach high position in th...
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Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'limits'?
Suggestion: limits
...is may seem to be fine, but actually it limit his circle of friends because there wil...
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Line 5, column 589, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... enable him to be an alluring person in most of people mind and give him great relationship wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in contrast, in fact, talking about, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18827160494 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80111425072 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533950617284 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9323113469 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0625 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152716441722 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559202888817 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037721228628 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107784557944 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378203884162 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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