When it comes to the topic whether the advertisements are honesty or not, people tend to develop various viewpoints. Some adopts the idea that advertisements oftens make products look better than what they really are, whereas, others are more inclined to the notion that business companies advertise their product with 100% accurate. Personally, I found myself in the same place as the former idea for the following reasons.
First and foremost, in order to get advantage with other competitive opponents, business corporations often praises products’ qualities up to attract the customers. In fact, advertisements oftens overlooks some drawback of what companies sell, so people thinks that this product is perfect for them. For example, Apple corporation says that Iphone have high level of privacy for their customers, but the did not advertise the fact that this phone battery is very weak and not longlast. As a result, people will just know that the secure of this product is excellent without notice the batteries. Indeed, they will thinks that no other company can have phones with that qualities. In brief, this allows Apple to have advantage in people’s belief.
Furthermore, opponents of my idea argue that advertisements are honesty because of the safety for customers. To be more specific, they thinks that if the advertisements overlook the drawback of the products, people after using these products will find it disappoint because the qualities do not satisfied them and stop using these product. This is true that users may feel upset, but they will continue to keep using these products because they find it harder for them to use similar product from other companies. For example, my mother can not use Samsung’s phones because she does not know how to use android. The reason is she has spend 5 years stick with Iphone, and the way to manage these phones are too differents. What can be clearly seen from this is exaggerate advertisement will find customers for company at the beginning and create habit of using these product to keep the users.
Ultimately, advertisements oftens make products look better than what they really are. In fact, people should be careful in buying stuff because the companies’ advertising is unreliable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...notice the batteries. Indeed, they will thinks that no other company can have phones w...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...or customers. To be more specific, they thinks that if the advertisements overlook the...
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Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'disappoints'?
Suggestion: disappoints
...after using these products will find it disappoint because the qualities do not satisfied ...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...es do not satisfied them and stop using these product. This is true that users may feel upset...
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Line 5, column 640, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...w to use android. The reason is she has spend 5 years stick with Iphone, and the way ...
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Line 5, column 766, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'exaggerated'.
Suggestion: exaggerated
.... What can be clearly seen from this is exaggerate advertisement will find customers for c...
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Line 5, column 866, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...the beginning and create habit of using these product to keep the users. Ultimately, adver...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, really, so, whereas, for example, in brief, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22615803815 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82458419595 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523160762943 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0669845865 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154204598633 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589430520112 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626321761147 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1235347278 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486313800372 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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