When it comes to the topic convenience in life today and in the past, people tend to develop various viewpoints. Some adopts the idea that our generation live an easier life than the our grandparent’s one thanks to the advanced technology’s help, whereas others are more inclined to the opposite notion because modern technology is too complex, it is hard for people to manage nowaday machines. Personally, I found myself at the same place with the former idea for the following reasons.
First and foremost, there is no war nowadays; unlike us, the previous generation had to deal with wars during their childhoods. It is undeniable the war deals a great harm to people’s life conditions. For example, my grandfather often tells me about his life when he was 10. At that time, our country was having a war with America; therefore, it was lack of safety for people. My grandfather told me that people could not live without worry because they had to protect themself from disasters from the bomb dropped into my grandfather’s village. In contrast, our generation live in a peaceful era and does not have to worry anything. In conclusion, life today is safetier than in our grandparents’ childhood.
Furthermore, advanced technology allows life to satisfied people’s demands. It is true that technology are better today than in the past. With the help of technology, people can do things faster and more efficiently, therefore, they can make money easily. Unfortunately, our grandparents were not lucky like us, older machines were not really this modern. To be more specific, if my grandfather wanted to contact with his brother in another city, he had to write a letter and it took him a long time to receive reply letter. On the contrary, nowadays, if I want to contact with my sister, I just need to call her through the phone and talk to her. Indeed, it clearly show thanks to technology, machines are more convenient today than in the past.
Ultimately, I believe that life today is not as hard as our grandparents’ childhood because of technology and peaceful life. As a result, we should respect what we have and throw our greeds away.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'our'?
Suggestion: the; our
...our generation live an easier life than the our grandparent's one thanks to the ad...
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Line 5, column 673, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shows'?
Suggestion: shows
...one and talk to her. Indeed, it clearly show thanks to technology, machines are more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, it is true, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98087431694 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08521730154 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554644808743 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4171468645 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9473684211 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173994490247 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588543313281 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037294299587 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108268916693 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295485257403 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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