TPO-12 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people adopts the idea that people should study focus on only one subject than broaden their knowledge of many subjects because deep knowledge is the most powerful tool for that person to foster their career. However, I find myself would be with this notion for the following reasons.

First and foremost, general knowledge is more powerful weapon for a person than deep knowledge. In fact, most of the leaders in big companies often have broad understanding in different areas. To be more specific, a CEO of a big company have to both understand technology of his product and the market that he is working on to bring out right business strategies for his company. On the contrary, specialize employees just need deep understanding of the subjects that they are working on. Unfortunately, because of the lack of other subjects knowledge, an specialize worker cannot reach high position in their life-work easily. Therefore, what can be seen from this comparison is having knowledge in many subjects creates advantage for people in their careers. Indeed, people should enlarge their learning.

Furthermore, academic knowledges also has a big influence on our social skills. For example, a person who is just good at math cannot have an attractive and interesting conversation about literature; therefore, he will have a lack of confident while talking about a great novel. This may seem to be fine, but actually it limits his circle of friends because there will be people that will not be interested in him. In contrast, general knowledge allow a person to join many conversation topics; he may not talk about it charmly but confidently. This enable him to be an alluring person in most people’s mind and give him great relationship with people.

Finally, it is more satisfied to study many subjects, not just one. In fact, student my find different pleasant in each subject. For example, math is great in logical thought, but lack of emotion; art is full of feeling, but it is too sad; music may cheer you up, but it easy to get bored. If a student learned all the interesting things from these subjects, he would be very attractive and easy to success. As a result, he will easily enlarge his circle of friends.

Ultimately, I believe that people should broaden their knowledge in many subjects areas; general understanding help them in developing their careers and sharpening their social skills. Moreover, it is also enjoyable to learn different things.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...f the lack of other subjects knowledge, an specialize worker cannot reach high position in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in contrast, in fact, talking about, as a result, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04622871046 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76447641453 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513381995134 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9192494885 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7619047619 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47619047619 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146601011036 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461940793708 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387006822745 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090522158977 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419543904653 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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