In the past few years, education has been playing a crucial part in the community. Parents prefer to give higher education to their children. Also, education is important to get a job due to increasing competitions in past decades. Some argue that having a broader knowledge of many subjects will be fruitful for the individual to get a job. While others hold the idea that the person will be more successful who just focusing on one specific subject. From my perspective, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, people who acquired more academic subjects, they will have more job opportunities. This is because people can work efficiently when they have knowledge from various fields. On top of that, companies tend to hire employees who are familiar with more than one subjects. Additionally, it is required to compete with higher competitions in the job market. For example, with the increasing competition between the individual who has done master in one subject, my company would like to hire an employee having knowledge of various subjects. That way, it is almost certain that graduates can compete for the job and easily hire by the company.
Furthermore, sometimes different issues are not separated from each other and they are interconnected. Same way, some subjects are connected to each other. Students would need to study more than one subjects to understand the one major subject and it would be beneficial for them in that way. I am a compelling example of this. I have pursued master on health care but for that, I have been required to complete many other related subjects like community subject and general prevention of community care because without completing those basic subjects, I was not allowed to study masters in health care.
Moreover, diverse information helps one to find the field in which they are interested in. Broad knowledge in various fields will be beneficial because one can choose interesting subjects among all the subjects. There are some people who have completed their specialization in one major field, and they realized that it is no more interesting subjects for them, however, they cannot switch to other fields at this position. On the other side, if students would study various subjects, they can switch to the other subjects anytime in the future.
All in all, I strongly believe that having knowledge in various fields have benefits which carry more weight compared to the alternative idea. This is because it gives flexibility in the selection process for the particular subject in the future and it helps to find a job easily in order to make one's career strong.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uitful for the individual to get a job. While others hold the idea that the person wi...
Line 4, column 167, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to interest'.
Suggestion: to interest
...ll be beneficial because one can choose interesting subjects among all the subjects. There ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04035874439 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72418848831 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482062780269 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8428784108 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54166666667 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285651071 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760618857252 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725227451629 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165579410724 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327538747763 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.