TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people hold the view that traveling in your own country is more advantageous than other countries, however, some other think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I contend that traveling other countries can be more enjoyable and beneficial.

To begin with, I firmly believe that traveling to other countries will broaden our horizon. Traveling to other countries will not only make us familiar with other culture but also we can learn lots from it. One can learn about countries’ traditional and the history of those people. Furthermore, experiencing different cultures can teach us a lot more than we read from the books. For instance, I always read in the books or in TV about the culture and how diverse the United States is. However, after I came to USA I learnt and saw many things that I would never be taught from those TV channels. Here, I saw how really living in a “melting pot” is and how people with all different backgrounds stand for each other and against discrimination.

The next important aspect which should be taken into consideration is that living in another country give us the chance to learn new language. No matter how long a person goes to language courses, he will never learn the language perfectly. On the other hand, traveling to the country itself and communicating with native people can be really helpful. To illustrate it, take me as an example, when I was in my country, I went to many English courses for roughly one year and I thought that I mastered this language. As soon as I came to USA, my first interaction was with a native officer in the airport. He asked me to show my passport, but he had to repeat three times so I could understand his accent. From that point, I realized that I actually don’t know the real English. What I learnt in my country was a very formal English with a very different pronunciation.

All in all, for the aforementioned ground, travelling to a new country can be very enjoyable, informative and very helpful for learning a new language.

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Average: 5.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76338028169 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86353788804 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529577464789 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0723115987 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.9444444444 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189490982038 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646704882348 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575468566085 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123063669354 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574010401665 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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