Nowadays, people are connected to a broader society; real life and virtual life.
Contemplating about only two of these source of impacts raised the question that whether
students are more influenced by teachers or friends. Although, some people might hold the
opposite view, I contend that friends are rather effective human beings on one’s mindset.
First of all, I think that we spend an immense amount of time with friends not with teachers.
Being with someone, observing their behavior and getting to know how they see the world can
really affect our vision. A good example can raise from my own experience. I had a friend, whom whenever I went out with, had a habit to help the homeless. She always used to say “give with one hand and take with the other”. Consequently, when I see a homeless, it reminds me of her words and I will help.
Another aspect that should be taken into consideration is that one’s friend is nearly the same age
as her. It is comprehensible that these youngsters’ perspectives are more of the same. Therefore, they more agree with each other’s opinion than a teacher who is most likely old-school and has no idea about new trends. To make it clearer, take my chemistry teacher as an example. I used to type my notes in the laptop at class. However, my chemistry instructor did not let me to, because of the fact that he thinks it is distractive. He didn’t realize that if I write in the laptop, it can be very helpful, due to the fact that it will be much faster and I will never lose the information. From this we can conclude that the age gap results in very different perspectives, which causes lack of understanding.
As a final point, I want to mention that friends know each other a lot. They spend many hours talking and sharing their life’s stories and opinions. They know what are their interests and know how to convince one another. Moreover, sometimes people just change their personalities to one more desirable that is better for their friendships. For example, a person tries to be more social just because her friends are social.
All in all, taking the aforementioned reasons into account, I think friends can be a great source of influence. Due to the fact that we spend a lot more time with each other. Being the same age and having an understanding of one another can be other reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for example, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78554216867 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7993176698 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561445783133 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2643127375 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.44 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.53405017921 243% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146770090972 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404736997217 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409614157358 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0561813170167 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543218066414 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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