Traveling is the one of the best thing that people can do for their own self development. It has many benefits to the people. Some people believe the idea that people get more benefit if people travel in abroad; others disagree. In my view, if people travel to foreign country it is more beneficial for people. The reasons are as follows.
the main reason is that while people in foreign country, people can see that country's culture. Without a doubt, every country has different culture than other. If people travel to their own country, people can not see any culture. However, in the foreign country people can see that countries culture which is beneficial for the people. For example, last summer I went to Thailand with my family. I stayed here for two week and that was my first time in Asia. After two week, I had a idea about Thai culture. And that changed my perspective permanently. However, If I travel to my own country, I can not see any cultures difference. I think the main purpose of traveling is learning new cultures. All in all, person who travel to abroad can see cultures differences, that is why traveling abroad more beneficial than domestic traveling.
Another reason for my opinion is, people can increase their international network while traveling in foreign country. Traveling is the best way to meet other people. If people travel to other countries people can increase their number international friends which is good for people. For example, my older brother went to Canada for traveling last year. He meet a lot of Canadian people in there. This year my brother wants to travel again to Canada. However, he has no enough money for hotel or hostel. Furthermore, my brother's Canadian friends offer a free room in their own room. Thanks to international friends of my brother now he can stay in their house. So, traveling other counties certainly develop the person's international network which can be very useful.
In sum, thorough some may oppose the idea, people get more benefit if travel abroad instead of their own country. Not only people see new culture in their travel but also people can meet people from other countries of world.Every people should make their travel plan to see other countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86422976501 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53090840307 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441253263708 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3919976971 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5357142857 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6785714286 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269731035572 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088982511169 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656192295924 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217342369063 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576908894223 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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