Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that children should be accustom with good behavior from primery stage of arrive to the society. the ability of finance managing is one of most important abilities that each person should be have it. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that children just should spend happy time and without anythisng that make them upset. They say that chlildern cannot understant why their parents want from them to manage their money and this condition make them unhappy. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that children should be practice to manage their own money at the young age.
First and foremost, ability to mange finance is like other abilities and skills that all children should to learn it. Most of people start to educating their children sicnce three or even younger age. Because they want to have very clever and successful children in future. They try to prepare their children to have good performance when they arrive to school. Even some of them pay remarkalbe amounge of money to pre-school centers. In fact, they should be attention that just a good grade in the school is not enough that their children have happy and health life in the future. All of psychologists agree that parents should pay one determined amount of money to their children and encourage their children to buy their favorit things just through saving their own money. In this shape children practice responsability and patiant.
One another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that It is clear that a lot of children dislike anythings that maybe limited them. They like to paly very time and do any works that they want to do. Maybe all of us faced with this view that one child stay toward of a shop and starting to cray and want from her/ his parent to buy that thing. Surely, if parent accept this request learn a negative behavior to their child. It is true that when parent do not buy this toy or thing for child, they make their child upset, but it have positive effect on child charecter. In my opinion learning to children to manage their own money have the same effect on charecter of children, even if they do not very satisfy about it.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that children should be learn to mange their own money to would become financially responsible adults. Because of impat of their ability on person life and strong psychological evidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, even so, in fact, in my opinion, it is true, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77674418605 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35009867116 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46976744186 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5171616059 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8095238095 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244942458927 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857060222919 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081477003654 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180641311518 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506160603615 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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