We are living in a modern society with the help of science and technology. They provide people with many benefits, and advertisement is not an exception. Therefore, the concept of most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are is debatable. In my opinion, I believe that the statement above is true. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the images and videos of advertised products are usually beatified by professional photographers deliberately. With the advanced techniques in photography, the products in the photos always look better than they are in reality, which, of course will attract the attention of the consumers very easily. To be more specific, last week I ordered a pizza online. I saw that pizza on the menu of the restaurant, which looked so delicious and attractive my attention with a lot of vegetable and onion as well as sausages. However, when it came to me, it just had some little sausages, a few crumbs of vegetable and no onion. This phenomenon disappointed me tremendously. I believe that other consumers would frustrate as I did when they find out the real products do not look as good as they are in the photos.
Secondly, the words and language are used very carefully in the advertisements, so that the advantages of the products will be highlighted while some disadvantages can be ignored by the consumers. In other words, in the advertisements people often do not tell people their products' disadvantages. My own experience is compelling in this case. When I was in nursing college, I needed to buy a new laptop with better performance and capacity. Meanwhile, I did not have a lot of money. So as always, I searched the internet and I found a powerful laptop at a reasonable price. After a few minutes of searching and exploring, I read the advertisement carefully; the words that were written said, “This computer is the most powerful one in the world”. I saw that its price was so good. Eventually, I ordered one of them. However, when I received my computer, I opened it immediately and I recognized that its quality was so poor. It contained a lot of viruses and went slowly. The advertisement told me nothing about the poor quality of other features of that laptop. In this case people made their products look better than it really was.
In conclusion, I think that advertisement is a good way for companies to sell their products. However, companies usually exaggerate their products and do not tell customers about the disadvantages of their products. They make them better than they are.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 483, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun vegetable seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of vegetables'.
Suggestion: a lot of vegetables
...icious and attractive my attention with a lot of vegetable and onion as well as sausages. However...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, of course, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8903803132 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04603033098 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492170022371 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3815146148 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0714285714 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9642857143 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201034817531 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050683490775 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670232569369 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138602491376 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586568345296 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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