People have different ideas about the question of whether it is better for children to choose jobs that are the same with their parents than to find a different job from their parents. This issue draws many discrepant notions from people. Some people believe that children can benefit a lot from having the same jobs with their parents. However, others would disagree with this idea. In my opinion, I do not agree with the statement that children will be more beneficial by having the same jobs with their parents. I feel this ways for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, children should choose a job that they are keen on. In other words, it is better for children to choose a job that they have knack of it. We all acknowledge that we are living in a rapid developing world. In this world, people concern much about the abilities to realize jobs. Generally speaking, in every company, owners tend to find productive workers and pay them a high salary. This means, if children have potential, they can be easily to have a good job. Meanwhile, if they choose their jobs following their parents ‘job, but they do not understand much about that job, it will be not an easy task for them. My friend is a compelling example of this case. He has a dream of becoming a singer, but his mom would like him to be a teacher. He obeyed his mom and being a biology teacher. However, it seems to me that he does not pay attention to his job. Whenever he meets me, he always says that being a teacher is a nightmare for him.
Secondly, if children choose a job that they love much, they will try their best to progress. Therefore, performing job will bring them happy. If they do not like their jobs, they will feel uncomfortable. It is no doubt that people often get stress from their job. It is understandable because nowadays the rate of competition among companies and workers is greater than ever before. Due to the fact that people have to face many difficulties to find a job; therefore, everyone always tries their best to do their jobs as best as possible in order to be professional and to be promoted to higher position. This phenomenon generates a lot of tensions to people
In conclusion, each of us has our own ideas about the issue of choosing a job. In my view, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly believe that it is better for children to find a job that they are interested in because this job not only brings them happy, but it also helps them to get rid of stress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
People have different ideas about the question of whether it is better for children to choose job...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...he same jobs with their parents. I feel this ways for two reasons, which I will expl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48922413793 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45191475416 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45474137931 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3112555347 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1153846154 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11538461538 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429214144569 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124223681061 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126519187024 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286811341112 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612516874191 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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