Advertisements have a significant effect on people. They encourage the individuals to buy more products to increase the profitability of the company. The advertisement leads to the success of the company. Achieving success nowadays is transformed into challenge due to inflation, sanctions and political conflicts. Some people believe that advertisements show the product in an excellent way. Others disagree. I agree that advertisements show products in a way that is much better than they are. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, the most prominent point to be mentioned is that most companies use modern technology to improve the quality and the appearance of their products. The digitization of the data has enabled the owners of the company to show their products in very efficient way by using professional camera, good effects and many methods. The new emerging trends, scientific innovations, knowledge explosion have made the maturity cycle of individuals so advanced that we usually see that nowadays girls and boys get familiar with the physical as well as physiological changes at early stages of their lives. This tendency has altered the thought pattern, lifestyle, social structure of our life as well as the responsibility that one undertakes in his specific life. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, I was interested in buying new phone, I searched the internet and watch television to see more advertisements which can help me to get the most affordable phone. I was surprising by the features of apple phone than samsung phone because of its advertisement which showed the camera as it was professional one. Therefore, I decided to buy the apple's phone. Then, I saw my friend with the other phone that I wanted to buy and I found it had more features than the phone I just bought. After that, I learned that the advertisement can deceive you since they show the product in an excellent way. This experience taught me that advertisements make products look better than they are.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that the company wants to increase its profit. By increasing the profit, the company will achieve high level of success and make the employees more confident, which help them to excel in the future career. The successful of the company will boost the employee's comprehension, understanding of the complex subject and intelligence. Everyone realizes that improving our skills and abilities is a great way to ensure more prosperous life. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my daughter's example. Last summer, while my daughter was watching advertisement about the toys, she asked me to buy it for her because the advertisement was so attractive to her. Therefore, I bought to her and I found the toy was expensive, however, it increased her intellectual abilities. In addition, I found that the company makes a lot of money from this toy. As you can see, increasing the profit will lead to make good advertisements.
To wrap it up, I believe that most companies introduce good appearance of their products. This is because there are new modern technology which can make it easier to show their products in excellent way, and because they can increase the company's profit. Everyone should recognize the effectiveness of the advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, i feel, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2858.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 564.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06737588652 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87326216964 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03548791994 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482269503546 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1439758521 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14917684975 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421473626187 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486296887021 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962307000232 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459428235688 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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