Noone can deny that there is positive and negative outcomes for playing computer games . Personally,I believe that playing computer games is a waste of time. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explain in the following essay .
First ,when children decrease playing computer games ,they will share every family's moment.They will help them in cleaning,cooking and shopping. so they will learn new things rather than playing the same game .My personal experince is a challenging example of this. Ten years ago , every thursday ,I went to my grandma with my parents speaking , eating and watching tv . these help me to see how the adults deals with other people and how they organize the table .And the day that i set on my computer playing games ,I don't feel anything from the family's moment and I feel like i'm stranger .
Secondly , avoiding the children from playing video games too much and making them learn new things like reading,swimming and riding horses will help them to develop their character which will affect their future Less video games means more time to learn
.For instance,my friend was always playing table tennis instead of playing video games,this allow her to rise her score in high score because she entered many competions and she won most of them .Therefore,she traveled many countries so she learns more about other cultures .and when she entered the university easily because of her great effort in sporting .
In conclusion , I'm of the opinion that video games can take too much time from you without feeling that and decreasing it from children is really important .This is because learning new things like reading,cooking,doing sports will help the children to become more ambitious and because keeping in touch with their families will support them and make them more confident .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03986710963 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65920481156 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568106312292 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 172.211612576 48.9658058833 352% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.555555556 100.406767564 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4444444444 20.6045352989 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.5376344086 758% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274083874028 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136936101363 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11591899044 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161528442623 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598421684677 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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