To make the most profit, advertisements often exaggerate benefits of products in order appeal the customers. This phenomenon is very prevalent, especially in selling stuff for kids. Although sometimes, advertising seems to be unrealistic, it really does help the company selling their product. To be more specific, there are 2 ways that advertisements make products look better than they really are.
To begin with, the first way of exaggerate advertising has something to do with beneficial from fantasy. Fantasy is unrealistic world that often has thing that people want the most, therefore, using this method allows advertisements to interest people. In fact, customers often see this kind of advertising in kids product like milk or snack. Kids are too young to distinguish between realistic and fantasy, so far they will believe what advertise told them. Using the benefits of this, companies often use heroes and fantasy characters to make children pay attention on their product. TH true milk, a popular product in Vietnam, publicize themself by a promotional video claims that if people drink their milk, they will be power rangers. It appeal right into children desire, so their parents become close customers of this company. In brief, exaggerate advertisements enable companies to appeal as many customer as possible.
Furthermore, the second way is in term of comparison. To be more clearly, companies often compare their products with similar ones from competition companies and claims theirs are better. For example, my sister’s company opened an event to compare their pan and other companies pan. However, the result from this competition was inaccurate. In fact, my sister’s side used a new pan while other side use an old ones, so it is not surprising that my sister won. As a result people believed that product from my sister’s company are more reliable, so far, they would prefer to use these products. In conclusion, companies benefit exaggerate advertising in having people trust; to keep developing their income, companies often use this method.
Ultimately, I find myself believes that advertisements oftens make the products look better than they really are. In fact, companies keep exaggerate advertising because they benefits economically from this. I believe that business student should put my ideas into careful thought in order to sharpen their marketing skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in brief, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41005291005 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90223697858 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542328042328 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3104871779 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.9545454545 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1818181818 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22727272727 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149483307925 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570218380775 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633709579734 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124722871254 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620477138143 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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