TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It,s very difficult to differentiate what more influenced on student teachers or friends. Some believes that teachers are more influenced on students. while, others believes that friends are more impact on students. In my opinions, friends more influenced on students. The reasons for my advocacy are as follows.

The very first reasons friends are more influenced because the similar age group. They shear their personals feelings and thought with friends more easily than teachers. Also they have same kind of activities like playing games and spend lots of time together.In case of teachers element of respect is comes in students mind which inhabit students to take influenced from teachers. students always keep them reserved and distance from them teachers and avoid them and they talk with them only for educational purpose.Friends are those we can call them any time, we makes jokes with them, so because of age group friends are more influenced on students life.

Secondly, the friends are more helping and caring for students in different ways than teachers. They helps in studies in making assignments,they borrow money from them in difficult time. when someone is very caring about you its human nature that more effective in your life than others. for instance when I moved in United States I took admission in school i was new in that environment, but fortunately I got some good friends, they were very kind to me and they helped me a lot in my studies and also finding a jobs they give me good company when I feel sad they encourage me achieves my goals so they positively influenced on my life than teachers or any other peoples in my life.

Due to aforementioned reasons, I firmly believes that friends are more influenced on students than teachers because of same age group,and there ways of helping and caring nature.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99675324675 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67045602574 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506493506494 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.9810477301 48.9658058833 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 109.928571429 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.5376344086 614% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189489927546 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893808286019 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477435613977 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130723252708 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342959570595 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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