TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Living in a society will affect our behaviors. It is no longer "me" it is always "us". To be more clear, there is no pure personality especially for children who are attending schools. In this regard, many people think students are more influenced by their teachers. There are other opinions that the students are more affected by their friends rather than by their teachers. I am personally inclined to believe that the former approach pales in comparison with the latter. I cling to this viewpoint for two reasons and will shed light upon them in the following.
To begin with, students choose their friends themselves, that means they are willing to be influenced by them. To be more clear, a person will choose friends according to their behaviors. That means that person admires and likes the other person behavior. This can be inferred as the person opts for obtaining that kind of behavior. So the student may try to become like his friends because he likes that kind of behavior. In observing friendship explicitly, you will find many similarities. For example, a group of friends may dress like each other, or greet in a certain way, or use the same language. That shows the influence among friends.
The next point to be mentioned is, students spend more time together in comparison to the amount of time spent in a class with their teachers. That can strongly indicate that students are more influenced by their friends. Friends spend a lot of time together in the classroom, during the breaks and even after schools. When a group of people spends a lot of time together, they start acting like each other. They catch each other behavior unconsciously. To be more specific, the behavior passes from a person to another without even people notice it. That is a scientific task. For example, when I was in university, I had a friend with whom I spent most of my days. After a while, our other classmates told us that we had become like each other. That was due to our emotional relationship and the amount of time we spent together. We did not even notice the process, but we became so similar that everybody noticed.
All in all, considering the foregoing points and examples, I am in favor of asserting that the students are more influenced by their friends than their teachers. A close study of the relationship between two students and between a student and a teacher would be a great help to support this viewpoint.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, while, for example, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80378250591 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69287790539 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465721040189 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6218298915 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5714285714 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1071428571 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 5.45110844103 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20373895794 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618021589384 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756808245046 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143722830547 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422254634747 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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