tpo 21- independent writing

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tpo 21- independent writing

i think, personaaly, suding hard is one of the most important factors in being succesful. as we try harder, we can obtain more information about the field that we work on that. based on that, we can get best grade in our exams. in my opinion, because of following reasons, studing hard has a key role in our future.
first of all, we prepare ourselves for geting jobs in future. So, for being good in our careers we need to learn all of the related things during our academic period. in real world we need real skills. so, i think the ability to relate with other people is not enough. for example, i have a friend that he is a very lazy person. i remember, he never did his assignments when he was in college. he always copied her homeworks. he failed in most of the courses that he had. but he was very confident that he could find a good carrier by using his father's friends. finaly, he get the job, but hr fired because he does not have skills. lacking of experienses was one of the major factors that he loose his job.
second, in my opinion, by earning skills and by obtaining information we can develop ourselves. having related skills and information in our fields cause progressing in our jobs. for instance, one of my friends was in her own feet. she do her bests in university and she earned the best scors in her exams. fonally, she applied for many jobs in many companies. after awhile she invited from most of the companies for interview. she got the best job with highest salary. and it is notthe all of story. after a year, she gradually got promotion in her career. now she is one of the managers of a great factory in my country. therefore, i think we have to use in our opportunities and studing hard make it possible. dreams come true and for these dreams we do not need anyone. i taught many things from my friend. she always encourage me to do my bests. i think for being a best person in our career we dont need wierd processes, we just need focous on our study. by hard studing we can earn not only brilliant position in society but also we can be a useful person.
in a nutsheel, i think people must try hard in their lessons. they have to gain many skills and also they have to earned best degrees. a fruitful person can find his/her way and do not need to other people.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.31177829099 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37119362139 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480369515012 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.2882873071 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.9117647059 100.406767564 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.7352941176 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26470588235 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 51.0 5.5376344086 921% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 11.7677419355 44% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 58.1214874552 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.83 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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