Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, family plays a vital role in a person's manner. Most of us spend our free time with our families. So, we can consider them as one of the important things in our lives. Many people contend that the extended family is less important now, while others assert it is not like that. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be some what convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that having extended family is less important in the new world. In the ensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that in the currently modern world human is very busy and spend most of her/his time to do her'his job. So, they have a little time to spend with their relatives such as grand parents, cousins and other members of the family. For example, we have an extended family consist of seven ancles, 10 aunts and twenty cousins, but because my father and also my mother are always busy we can not see them. Our visiting just limited to summer holidays. So, I really believe that the extended family is not very important, now.
Another point spriging to mind is that by emerging technologies and the amount of vehicles that move people from one point to another point, people can choose every wher to leave. So, the distance between the families is large. As you can see, people cannot see their relatives. Farthermore, these days people are not limited just to their relativs and there is a possibility that they have nothing in common. So, they can replace their families with good friends. Sometimes, having good friends can be more valuable than having families. Good friend can trust each other with their lives. As you can see, having extended family is not a big deal.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see that the extended family has nothing to do with people. Because people are so busy to visit their familis. Also, most of the time they live in different part of the world and seeing them needs too much time. So, people prefer to have good friends instead of an extended family. Believe it or not people just need to have people around them to have fun time whetaher it be a family or be a friend.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...e doubt, family plays a vital role in a persons manner. Most of us spend our free time ...
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Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: SOME_WHAT_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhat' (=slightly)?
Suggestion: somewhat
... of the opposing arguments appear to be some what convincing and stand to point. However,...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vation of life have led me to agree that having extended family is less important...
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Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d family has nothing to do with people. Because people are so busy to visit their famil...
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...round them to have fun time whetaher it be a family or be a friend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5401459854 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29167633362 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496350364964 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8463658114 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.64 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.44 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147356605033 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489465222691 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467701776625 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100799556829 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040434001928 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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