In the last few decades, as time marches on, a lot of students have been pursuing their higher education compared to the past. On that ground, it has become hard to get a good position job following graduation. In this regard, while some people think that working fast and taking risks is the only way to succeed, others hold a different opinion that people should work carefully to avoid mistakes. From my vantage point, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that with the increasing competition at workplace, people find it hard to get a job nowadays. Not only that but also employees are being expected to constantly showcase their better performance in the company. In such a scenario, a person who works slowly and carefully might not prove himself and lose the job. On the contrary, performing every task ahead of the time would definitely help workers to highlight their abilities in front of the manager, and thereby, they have a better chance to get promoted at the workplace. Drawing from my own experience, I have been working in the Reliance firm for the last five years. I have always been a slow performer, and I used to complete my tasks diligently. Therefore, I neither get promoted nor get any big increments in the salary in those years. By and large, had I changed my working style a little bit, I would not have to stick with the same salary for the last many years.
Another noteworthy point is that tasking risks in the given tasks do not always end up negatively. As a matter of fact, people who work carefully in life would also make mistakes, and needless to say that a person can learn better by making mistakes. Thus, performing risky tasks might create an invention even after making mistakes. For instance, if scientists would not have taken risks in order to fly the Airplane for the first time, the invention of the Airplane had never happened. Beyond and large, even though it is hard to perform tasks by taking risks, persistent hard work and enthusiasm would help one’s to succeed in life.
All in all, contemplating all remarks, I strongly believe that people can be successful by working quickly and risk making mistakes. This is because it helps perform better than others and sometimes, risky projects lead to unexpected inventions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 890, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...large, had I changed my working style a little bit, I would not have to stick with the sam...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...needless to say that a person can learn better by making mistakes. Thus, performing ri...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ojects lead to unexpected inventions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, as a matter of fact, by and large, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79854368932 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53909366778 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53640776699 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4168428467 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.85 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156690623635 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456743034498 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381721991331 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100087511546 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010595034409 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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