Nowadays, teenagers are mostly focusing on their school lessons and they spend a huge part of the day in school or school-related subjects such as doing homework, working on assignments, etc. After the invention of the Internet and its expansions, teenagers often tend to spend their time after school on it and they may not gain much from this specific time. A controversial debate that is often raised regarding this topic is whether teenagers should take a part-time job together with their education and academic life. Clearly, this has several advantages and disadvantages. Some people are inclined towards the idea that having a part-time job is beneficial. While others look at this from a different perspective. If I were forced to choose, I would prefer that it would be better for them to experience a part-time job during their education for several reasons, and I will elaborate on these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin substantiating my standpoint, having a part-time job in the early stages of life will help students get new experiences and skills. It will prepare them for their upcoming life and future jobs, and they will be more inclined to accept big challenges in their work. I have to admit that my opinion is profoundly influenced by my personal experience. You see, when I was studying maths at high school, I was working in a computer hardware-fixing shop after school. At first, I was a bit nervous and could not do much but as time passed, I learned from the shop owner and I started doing simple tasks. After about two months, I was confident in my skills in finding what the problem is with the hardware, and sometimes I could solve the problem by myself. Today I am working on Intel which is the pioneer company in computer hardware production and experience. I learned much from my part-time job during my young ages, and it definitely helped me through this. For this reason, experiencing a part-time job can become useful in the future.
Another reason which is worth being discussed is that working on a part-time job in real life will hone one's social skills. Through interaction with more people with various characteristics, a teenager can practice living in adult life. In fact, social and communication skills are one of the key features of a person because we are living in a group. Moreover, people are usually dependent on each other so communicating properly is a necessity in today's life. Drawing from one of my friend's experience, he was a part-time librarian in the central library in our city for two years. He was a shy and introverted person. His job was to help people find the books they are looking for. Through this job, he learned how to interact with different people and he honed his social skills. Today, he is working at the national library, the most well-known library in our country, and he is successful in his job. It's certainly clear why having a part-time job as a teenager will help him/her gain social skills.
In light of the reasons above, I genuinely believe that experiencing a part-time job, even for a few months, can help a teenager prepare better for the future and improve his communication skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 665, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t having a part-time job is beneficial. While others look at this from a different pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, as to, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2651.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84643510055 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82362446062 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486288848263 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2571980737 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1851851852 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2592592593 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25925925926 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275080493951 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787634636883 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652962753969 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186936706521 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0129570539247 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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