Annually, a lot of students graduate from universities and colleges and start interacting with a wider environment and people. They were living in a small society which was contributed only by the students and the staff. They gained a vast amount of knowledge in different areas and they may also have some experiences in sports and social activities. A controversial debate which is often raised regarding this topic is whether or not there should be an equal emphasis and financial supports for sports and activities at universities and colleges. If I were forced to choose, I would prefer students to have an equal chance to participate in college activities and sports for several reasons, and I will elaborate on these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin substantiating my standpoint, hardly can anyone deny the fact that the more one person learns, the better. In this context, students will have a chance to learn more about different aspects of life, and hone their skills in distinct areas. Moreover, they will be more ready for the life after college and the university and they will be prepared for assorted types of precarious situations they will probably face in their future life. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was a computer engineer student at the university, the primary focus of our department was on improving our computer skills. Thus, in almost ten hours every day, I was sitting on a chair working with my laptop and I was not the only one getting accustomed to this habit. This resulted in a considerable weakness in socializing and interacting with others in me and my colleagues. For this reason, in order to prepare students for their upcoming events, it will be better to get some social and sports skills at the university.
Another reason which is worth being discussed is that as students participate in sports and social activities, they will probably have more fun. It can be a time of leisure and relaxation after cumbersome class schedules and intense study times and students can enjoy spending time together. Drawing from one of my friend's experience, he was a college student about three years ago. Professors in his university had a harsh schedule for their course projects and my friend was exhausted almost every day. But the chief director of their department found out about this situation and organized a social activity called "Student's Funeral" and sent an email to every student and encouraged them to participate. After this event which was held monthly in the university, students include my friend had more energy to start all over again.
In light of the reasons mentioned above, I genuinely believe that focusing equally on sports and social activities is a necessity for every university and college and it will cause students to learn and experience more and it will be fun.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...is often raised regarding this topic is whether or not there should be an equal emphasis and f...
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Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: SENT_AN_EMAIL[1]
Message: Consider using 'emailed'.
Suggestion: emailed
...called 'Students Funeral' and sent an email to every student and encouraged them to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81236879593 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496932515337 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5703018993 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.25 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.45 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146372623415 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506962423857 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580904602838 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117099896865 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595775738854 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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