Parents' intervention in their children's upbringing has long been the cornerstone of the human society. It has been argued that parents should encourage their youngsters to undertake a part-time job as a preparation course for their adulthood lives. While I believe it can not be generalized to all cases, I tend to agree on such a view based on the following concerns.
The first point to support such a view is that part-time occupations have paved the ways for a wide range of opportunities for teenagers. Firstly, since they have spent most of their time on school-related assignments or problems, they might not be aware of social norms and future career framework. Hence, it allows them to gain not only the experience about a specific field but also they can acquire knowledge about time management, communication skill, and problem- solving dexterity. Additionally, they can develop their social circle as a critical point in order to boost their level of maturity for the future lifetime.
Moreover, there has been a public recognition of this fact that monetary issue should be learned to the children as it is beneficial to nourish them self-dependence. In fact, when teenagers start working as part-time employees, they have a better understanding of the value of money and how hard one can provide their first and main necessities. Not surprisingly, not only do they become more satisfied with their possessions abut also they gradually perceived that how they should develop their self-reliance lifestyle.
Despite its merits, there is a little doubt that the circumstance of the young population workplace has a great impact on their future job perspective. Admittedly, the improper or harsh environment might have a corrosive consequence on youngsters. Needless to say, compared to others, they have less time to perform their responsibilities. They, therefore, might work in a place with a flexible timetable to take some time off in urgent cases. In addition, some exceptional motivation should be considered for them or otherwise, they might be reluctant to commit their duties. As a result, it seems essential to parents to consider each child potential and encourage them to whether a partial job is necessary for them or not.
From what have been discussed, taking up a vocation can benefit the young population in different aspects of their lives. As it was mentioned, they become more mature through gaining experience and develop their lifestyle dependently. However, their sensitive circumstance requires more attention if they tend to work.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209251101322 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.15859030837 0.158761421928 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0947136563877 0.0866891130778 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0506607929515 0.046263068375 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0925110132159 0.0685040099705 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.11013215859 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0396475770925 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07296123828 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0374449339207 0.0309702414327 121% => OK
Particles: 0.00440528634361 0.00188951952338 233% => OK
Determiners: 0.0770925110132 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0286343612335 0.0209618222197 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00881057268722 0.0139019557991 63% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2579.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 412.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25970873786 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359223300971 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28640776699 0.251872472559 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.223300970874 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.184466019417 0.112833075102 163% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07296123828 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546116504854 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 62.8919707624 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.6842105263 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2972348189 48.84282405 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.736842105 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.736842105263 0.644075263715 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 50.3249872253 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.1897810219 1.45489161554 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365035049077 0.300154397459 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0882983715875 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0499592999038 0.0752933317313 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.495886793223 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0753529963695 0.151897553556 50% => Sentences are similar to each other in a paragraph.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134350555808 0.114077575197 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582083307349 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.306422090188 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0556800594947 0.067059652881 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233591760966 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671277479498 0.0618886996521 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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