TPO-24 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples

There are many factors or considerations which take into that by motivating their teenage children for part-time job parents can help them to make ready for future. As far as I am concerned , according to the following reasons and from my personal experiences and conviction that part-time job can be helpful for preparing future . someone consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The reasons will be explored in the following essay.
The first exquisite reason which gives adherence to my viewpoint is related with experience part-time job can be help full in various way. My experience is good example for this after 12th class there is a gap in which result came out on that time my dad encourage for part -time job because that time I have nothing to do so accept it and working a part-time job in shop at time what I have learned is one of the most import thing in my life from that part time job I did not make a lot of money but this was my own money from my job which helps me to have to invest money and value of money , from the part time job teenager can understand how much difficult is to make money and preacher that will come in near future which an be help full .
Apart from the fact above mentioned above, one should regard subtle point meticulous that is pertaining to obtaining huge experiences . the noteworthy refreshing intelligible statistics ,revealed oby a recent social study research in my country show that majority of parents agree that part time job is useful for their teenage children. To shed the light on the issue according to the result of the study done in delhi university a lot of adult say that their teenage part time job was help full for them as thy are experience job before is help them be to do their job without hesitation.
Admittedly , someone may have justification that there are more better way parents can help their children .job in teenage ware thy only need to focus In their study ,part time job can distract them from their career goal , their part time nothing to do with their children adult life. I still affirm that parents can help by suggesting part time to their children

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45553968312 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483116883117 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.09964258 48.9658058833 302% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.0 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.5376344086 524% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40660320321 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181608613267 0.076458572812 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103664690964 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290215707276 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539119532835 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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