Parents should encourage teenager children to do part-time jobs when they become adults. In my opinion, I agree to the statement because by doing part-time jobs adults can learn more things like they can increase their confidence levels, decision-making skills and can be independent and lastly they can learn the responsibilities in their life.
First, by doing part-time jobs adults can increase their confidence levels. If they increase this skill, they can handle any problem in an effective way. For instance, when I was studying engineering, I used to depend on my parents without doing any job so that I am unable to take decisions on my own and I also used to feel so shy to speak with others. But after some days, I realized to do a job by seeing my friends. Hence, by doing the job I came to know a lot of things in the outside world which helped me to increase confidence levels in me, and now I was able to speak with others without hesitation.
Second, if parents do not encourage their children to do jobs, they will become lazy. Children will not learn anything about the responsibilities, the value of the money, hard-working nature e.t.c. Therefore, to keep children in a right way and habituating them to face difficulties in their life part-time job is very important. So that in future they will not be upset for any situation and will be able to handle the problems by themselves.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that teenage children should get some help from their parents to encourage them to do part-time jobs which helps them to be independent and to take decisions on their own in a proper way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...this skill, they can handle any problem in an effective way. For instance, when I was studying engi...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ture e.t.c. Therefore, to keep children in a right way and habituating them to face difficulti...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...dent and to take decisions on their own in a proper way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73333333333 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81900073759 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5724218554 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.636363636 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355578720973 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151398766594 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951143210621 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249794837166 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680277943142 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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