In today's world, jobs become more complicated and required sharp energetic minds to obtain and fulfill their employers demands in a precise quick approach. It's more possible for a adult which have enough knowledge about his interests and talents before entering to adulthood, to acquire a job position in the situation mentioned before. So in my opinion one of best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take part-time job for two reasons.
First, part-time jobs make teenage children a better understanding about their interests. By taking different part-time jobs in variety kinds of jobs, teenagers can find and follow their appropriate profession eventually. This could encourage them to aim their efforts in their educational life to obtain a better chances to get their interesting job. For example when I was at high school I took a part-time job at my father's friend company. They produce simple utilitarian electrical devices and sold them to local market. I was at assembling part of this company and after a summer working their i found it work very interesting and after my high school i chose to study electrical engineering at university.
Second, taking a part-time job could involve teenage children more efficient to their forehead adult society. Adult life is full of responsibilities and one of the most important ones is taking a job and making money. Teenage children who take part-time jobs would be more familiar to this important responsibility and after entering to adult life they would cope with it efficiently. To make this happens they must learn how to behave in their particular society they live and respect its values.
Parents could and should encourage their children to take part-time jobs because of it obvious benefits. They may be long-term benefits but at a competitive modern world, they prepare teenage children to show their maximum capability and talents at very first time they enter adult life. So I severely recommend parent to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11940298507 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75879040198 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531343283582 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9006036019 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.1875 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493113811682 0.236089414692 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1792860002 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159465811815 0.0737576698707 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323324294747 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670843209792 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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