TPO 25 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's world in order to a community make a progress, every person should help their community. While some people believe that these days young people do not get involve to community activities in order to improve it, the others hold the view that the juveniles are so active in improving the community. Personally, I am of the former group's point of view. The reasons substantiating my view point are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the youngsters nowadays, wasting their time just on entertainment. To elaborate, the social media encourage the juveniles to following the crowd. In other words, these social media show the teenagers a lot of modern fascinating games, fashion industry, and etcetera. As a result, the youngsters have been gotten into these subjects and they do not have any time that they can involve in community activities and help their communities. For example, I have a 19-year old brother who is highly active in social media. He is always working with his phone and producing photo and video clip to put on his page. As a result, he is always at home and do not doing anything helpful for the community.
Moreover, there are more work and duties that juveniles have compare to past. Nowadays, the parents encourage their children to attend in variety of classes such as training for musical instrument, gyms and language classes. Besides, they go to school or university and the teachers give a lot of tasks to them. Consequently, the teenagers have a variety of works to do and they cannot put any times for helping their communities. For example, I am a stundent in one of the best university in my country and I'm a memeber of education elite group. However, due to doing a lot of homeworks, attending in laguage class and working in the gym, I have no time to do an activity which is helpful for mu community.
As shown abow, considering all of the reasons and points mentioned above, one may conclude that the youngsters do not pay attention to their community and do not put time to helping their communities. It is because, the social media encourage them to waste their time on inane stuff and the variety of task which they should do nowadays.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'compared'.
Suggestion: compared
...ore work and duties that juveniles have compare to past. Nowadays, the parents encourag...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, however, may, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7984496124 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.713820522 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7258865916 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7368421053 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23424980425 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723590933743 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670286414964 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156195640664 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424793828896 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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