TPO 26: It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs.
Nowadays technology bring about a revolution in jobs. People could give different variaties of careers for their future. In this regret, I have to admit that I completely disagree with this statement. There are several reasons to support my idea. Firstly, technology and computer create a broad number of new jobs opportunities. Secondly, children's abilities and skills may different from their parents. I will elaborate my reasons and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first reason to be mentioned is that, technology and internet provide new area for jobs. As a boy who lived in a farmer family, the story of my life also could justify my reason, my parents never use computers in their careers and lack of internet in my grandparents' time make them stick to their traditions, however, I personally belive that I have other opportunity for my future job. My parents used to hardworking while I am planning to use internet for advertising home-made products, not to mentioned that computer aids application also acquire new ways of planting crops.
From another aspect changing children abilities and children lifestyle have dramaticaly changed in span of last dacade. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view, my parents always try to produce some thing and they want be profitable for their sociaty, in contrast, I personally prefer to acquire more money and find this goal in bussiness, not to product myself. To make a long story short, during my childhood I saw my parents hardworking while there was not sufficient income, in my point of view, new era needs new way of thinking and new approach to life. All in all, I prefer less work but more money and I cannot find this lifestyle on my family job.
All mentioned above into consideration I pretty convined that there is couple of reasons to foster the idea of children could opt different career from their parents such as new technology and computer programs avaliable only in recent time and changing children abilities and lifestyle, meanwhile there is some pradoxical reason such as lack of family experience in new jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
... view, my parents always try to produce some thing and they want be profitable for their s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75327191291 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527932960894 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.1807022453 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182960964496 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674928066509 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501262567141 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127374111748 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166067885481 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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