Do you agree or disagree? Parents should offer money to their school-age children for each high grade they get.
Students have to spend a great deal of their time at schools and study hard. So this is important for children to have a motivator to study hard. In this regard, I have to admit that I totally agree with the statement which says parents should offer financial aid to children for gaining mark. I have a couple of reasons in support of my view and I will elaborate my reasons in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that in my point of view money is a tools to engage children to study well at school. The story of my cousin could reveal my idea. As a ten years old boy, he prefers to spend most of his time play video games. His mother had to use a different strategy to promote his children to study. Finally, his mother asked him to rise his grade, as a result, she will give him a considerable amount of money. To make a long story short, that mechanism really works for him and now my cousin is number one student in his classroom
From another aspect children feel more responsible to their task. We should bear in mind that children have to deal with the difficulty of their future and they must prepare for new roles in society. Children have to learn the importance of their efforts, they could earn money only by hard working. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view. My parents taugh me to study hard and if I study enough they give me money. This way of working shape my mind logically, working hard equal to earn money. Consequently, my parents convey how to deal with my career to do my best.
Taken all aspects mentioned above into consideration, I am pretty convinced that there are a number of benefits to foster the idea that parents should financial supports for children to increase their grades. Meanwhile, an increasing number of parents believe that by offering money for rising grades, children will look forward for parents’ aid, while grad is inseperable part of study and children must do their best at schools without asking for money. These kind of people blame money as a motivator for other kind of aggressive behavior. Children will impolite and ask for money not to do so.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a tool' or simply 'tools'?
Suggestion: a tool; tools
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, look, really, so, well, while, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56608478803 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45247106751 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511221945137 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7927686835 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.55 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.05 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286540786936 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920998220456 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778724748603 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182324275869 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867459428771 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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