TPO24 integrated writing

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TPO24 integrated writing

The reading passage hold the idea of remaining animal fossiles have a high value information of living animals who lived in the past, however, as professor said in listening part this data may not give a correct information, because the fossiles may caused some changes by environmental events.
First, the reading passage suggested the idea of holes in fossile bones of T.rex are related to the vessels, in contrast, in the listening past cast doubt on this idea, due to the fact that bacteria could also make such holes.
Second, some examines of fossile bone illustrate presence of spheres which could remaned of blood cells, while professor said this spheres could be a reddish material in the inner bones.
Finally, some scienticts conduct a research on fossile leg bone that depict it have collagen which is a kind of protein that make a bone tissue. Mean while, the listenning section said collagen would disappear after one hundred year and this protein could not related to the fossile, to put it in other word, collagen may related to something else such as human skin of researcher which handle the bone.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ed of blood cells, while professor said this spheres could be a reddish material in ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 34, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ones. Finally, some scienticts conduct a research on fossile leg bone that depict it have...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...arch on fossile leg bone that depict it have collagen which is a kind of protein tha...
^^^^
Line 4, column 145, Rule ID: MEAN_WHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meanwhile'?
Suggestion: Meanwhile
...ind of protein that make a bone tissue. Mean while, the listenning section said collagen w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'relate'
Suggestion: relate
...hundred year and this protein could not related to the fossile, to put it in other word...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, may, second, so, while, in contrast, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 1373.03311258 68% => OK
No of words: 189.0 270.72406181 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93121693122 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45020965161 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 145.348785872 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608465608466 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 419.366225166 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 21.2450331126 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6786484261 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 186.4 110.228320801 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8 21.698381199 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.8 7.06452816374 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2954437181 0.272083759551 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167410999527 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688785146704 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173947133522 0.162205337803 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690730019148 0.0443174109184 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 13.3589403974 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 53.8541721854 63% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.0289183223 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.498013245 160% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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