TPO 25: Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
Helping people is one of basic characteristic of any people, however, in the recent years this feature bacome less and less important for young people and it make a desaster for future of humanity. In this regret, I have to admit that I totaly agree with this statement. There are several points to support my reason. Fistly, parents did not transfer the concept of helping to their children during last decades, secondly, younng people spend most of their time using social netwoks and internet. I will elaborate my reasons and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first thing comes to mind is the concept of helping stick spot light in memory of people of my country for long time, unfortunatly, during last decade parent did not spend sufficient time to teach moral concepts to their children. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view, as a children grow up in poor family, my parents had to work all day time, as a result, my brother and I always went to street and plaied with other children. My mother never teach me how to behave or never teach me why I should help other. To make a long story short, I never help people.
From another aspect spending most of our time for social networks and dealing with internet also make young people more busy than every time in past. Teenagaers always deal with social-networks and have less time to participate in real world, as a result they could not help their families. Example of my cousin could justify my reason, he is fifteen year old boy who join in several social-network such as facebook, instagram, etc. It is obvious he spent many more houres a day chating with his friends and could not help his parents
To put all reasons mentioned above into considration I pretty convinced that young people do not give sufficient amount of time to helping their surronding people or even their family due to the fact that, parent did not teach them moral concepts and did not respectfully shaped their children characters, furtermore, teenagers spent lots of their time dealing with internet and social-networks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79508196721 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57890644615 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549180327869 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.67422341 48.9658058833 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.0 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237802471326 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081752049638 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793124440025 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168733136995 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689094229971 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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