One of the best ways that parents can help their teenager children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
In this regred, I have to admit that, I totally agree with this statement. There are several point in supporting of my idea. Firstly, parents learn children to become financialy independent and make them ready for their future roles in life and sociaty. Second, children will learn new skills and try to choose which one is suitable for their future career.I will elaborate my reasons and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample example.
The first reason come to mind is that, encouraging of children to take a part-time job, they earn mony and be respectful to the concept of money, to put it in other words, children will not waste their money and save it for necessary requirement. In this way children become responsibe and they prepare themself for future role in life, they are future mothers and fathers so from childhood they shaped their characters and become financially independent. My personal anecdote will well demonstarate this point of view. As fortheen year old son, living in poor family, I learned how important is money and try to save it, not expend the money for low priority stuff such as up-to-date smartphone or buing new shoes every year and now I can easy handle a family.
from another aspect learning new skill also is noticiable one. An example of my brother could also justify my reason. He went to different factories to lean skills. finaly when he reached at the age of 25, my brother was a profassion with different skills which was really engaging for many company. After a few days he got a well-paied job. In other words, by learning various ability from childhood, people are more prone to take a desiared job in their adoulthood.
Taken all aspect mentioned above into consideration, I will completely convinced that there are many reason to foster the idea of encourage children to take a part-time job such as they become financialy independent and responsible to money, beside that, children could learn different type of skills and try to choose which of them is suitable for their future career. Meanwhile, there are some paradoxial reasones such as children may have not enough time to learn their schools material and reversly affected their performance at school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, as for, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90476190476 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6140029445 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550264550265 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.4432884361 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.875 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266417986195 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755341927297 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776212433892 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162757553915 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552658574616 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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