Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parents usually concern about the future of their children and try to guide them. Some parents stimulate their children to find a part-time job as a way to make them ready for adult life. However, other parents my not concur with this idea. If I were asked what approach do you like, I would prefer to encourage them to take part-time jobs for two compelling reasons.

The main reason behind that it helps youth become independent, and increase their confidence. When parents give juveniles a chance to take a job to make money, young people perceive it as an excellent opportunity to prove themselves as an independent person. For example, when I was young, I wanted to buy a mobile phone, but I didn't have money. So I asked my father to give me money, but he said to me it is the time when you earn money yourself. After that, I first became upset with my father; Then, I attempt to find a part-time job. After six-month working, I bought a mobile phone. Not only did I buy a cell-phone, but also I proved myself to my father. Therefore, parents should encourage children to take part-time jobs as a way to lead them to be independent and preparing for adult life.

Second, having worked in a part-time job, juveniles have gained vast experiences for future employment. Teenagers do not have enough experience, and they need to achieve it by working. Not only are these experiences cause teenagers to earn money, but also provide an opportunity for them to communicate with others. They could learn many things during the time that they work. For example, an adolescent who is encouraged by parents to work for a job that he is interested in it. After a while, he has learned a lot of things, and he could use these experiences in adulthood. Consequently, teenagers could be ready for a future lifetime by working in part-time jobs that are suggested by parents.

To make a long story short, parents should motive their children to find a part-time job that prepares them for adulthood because it makes them both independence and well-experienced for a later time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
..., I wanted to buy a mobile phone, but I didnt have money. So I asked my father to giv...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and well-experienced for a later time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71900826446 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74649706632 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509641873278 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9730454646 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.65 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349400392502 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111053267546 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101523320507 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241088459068 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737463347239 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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