TPO 46

Essay topics:

TPO 46

The reading passage suggested that using computers and storing patient's data have a lots of advantage and suggest three reasons to support its claim, however, the professor cast doubt on this claim.
First, according to the reading passage, using computer could decrease costs due to the fact that there is no need to store paper-base data and only need for entering information to the computer, in contrast the lecterer mentioned that doctores usually keep this information for emergency situations as a result this decline in cost is insignificant and doctors have to pay extra for storing data in computer.
Second, the passage explain that by using computers the human error could be eliminated, because the mistakes during writing or transcription could decreas, the lecterer refutes this point by saying that doctors use pen to take notes by hand and office worker enter the data to the computer, consequntly, the error are still possible by worker interpretion.
Finally, the reading passage describe possible ways to gather patient data for other researches and this information could use for further doctors, the professor challenged this point by saying that patient information are private data, beside that for using this information we must have permission of patient and there are a number of stick rules for accessing this data.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...omputers and storing patients data have a lots of advantage and suggest three reasons ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1132.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 215.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26511627907 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66842199304 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553488372093 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 21.2450331126 249% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8868808893 49.2860985944 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 283.0 110.228320801 257% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.75 21.698381199 248% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06452816374 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193602203513 0.272083759551 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119740706681 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372598353684 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119740706681 0.162205337803 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372598353684 0.0443174109184 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 13.3589403974 227% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.68 53.8541721854 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.0289183223 218% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.42419426049 122% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.7273730684 256% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.2 10.498013245 221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.2008830022 214% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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