TPO24 integrated writing-Enhanced

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TPO24 integrated writing-Enhanced

The reading passage hold the idea of remaining animal fossils have a high value information of ancient species, however, as professor said in listening part these data may not give a correct perspective to scientists, because the fossils under influence of some environmental condition have changed.
First, the reading passage suggested the idea of holes in fossil’s bones of T.rex are related to the vessels, in contrast, the listening past cast doubt on this idea, due to the fact that bacteria could also make such holes in bones.
Second, some examines of fossil’s bone illustrate presence of spheres which could remain of blood cells, while professor said this spheres could be a reddish material in the inner bones.
Finally, some scientists conduct a piece of research on fossil’s leg bones that depict it have collagen which is a kind of protein that make a bone tissue. Meanwhile, the listening section said collagen disappear after one hundred year and this protein could not relate to the fossils, to put it in other word, collagen may related to something else such as human skin of researcher whose handle the bones.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...in of blood cells, while professor said this spheres could be a reddish material in ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
... fossil's leg bones that depict it have collagen which is a kind of protein tha...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, may, second, so, while, in contrast, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 963.0 1373.03311258 70% => OK
No of words: 188.0 270.72406181 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12234042553 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 4.04702891845 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70323209964 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 145.348785872 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 298.8 419.366225166 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 21.2450331126 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2020746441 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.6 110.228320801 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6 21.698381199 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.8 7.06452816374 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269106934125 0.272083759551 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154973828321 0.0996497079465 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0893197542017 0.0662205650399 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163876449486 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835034283682 0.0443174109184 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.3589403974 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 53.8541721854 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.0289183223 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.7273730684 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.498013245 160% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.2008830022 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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