TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

What an important aspect of human beings' lives which palys a prominnet role in their prosperities, in a great extent, is jobs. People spend most of their time on their jobs, which greatly affect their private lives as well as their social habitats. Germane to this fact, a question which is the matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether people should abandon the chance of getting secure jobs and wait for finding vacancies which suit them and are more satisfying. Although some people may be on the belief that individuals should not take the opprotunities of getting secure jobs, I am personally of the conviction that people should wait for careers' which satisfy them for two conspicuous reasons.

One compelling reason giving in favor of this thesis is that being interested in (your) jobs is a key factor of (in/to) gaining prosperities. To put it in general words, one (of) the cons (pros) of being interested in jobs is that individuals sacrifice themselves to (for it/to doing it) their jobs and this increases their chance for gaining promotions. To elucidate more on the issue, it is worth pointing out that individuals, who are charged with satisfactory jobs, are much more hard working and pay much more attention in (to) accomplishing tasks which are assigned to them. Therefore, they (this lead them to) become the focus of attention of their managers immediately and this (which) increases their chance for getting promotions and prosperities. As an illustration, last year, when I was working in a high prestige company in my hometown, one of my co-workers loved (had satisfaction of doing s.th.) his occupation so much. He was working hard every day and he loved (was eager to) to manipulate difficult situations. As a direct result of his tries (the aforementioned explanations), he promoted so rapidly and get the control of the overall company. This taught me, (that) people who love their jobs and feel that their jobs satidfy them are nuch more likely to succeed rather than others.

Another reason that cannot go unnoticed is that if a job which is assigned to a person satisfies himself/herself (his/her requirments), this (then his/her private life will also positively influenced) greatly affects his/her private life. To shed some lights on this premise, it is well known that people spent most of their time on their jobs and if someone suffer from the situation, then its effects is (will) directly transmmited (change) to his/her behavior. As an illustration, according to (the results of) a research paper which published in a journal, reveals that people who have problems in their jobs, face a lot of problems

To wrap it up, I am one of the proponents who cites a clear bias in favor of the fact that people should wait to find a job which suit them completely. Finding a satisfactory job not only increases our chance of gainning promotion, but also positively affects our private lives.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...rosperities. To put it in general words, one (of) the cons (pros) of being intere...
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...) the cons (pros) of being interested in jobs is that individuals sacrifice thems...
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suffers'.
Suggestion: suffers
...their time on their jobs and if someone suffer from the situation, then its effects is...
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... (the results of) a research paper which published in a journal, reveals that peo...
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...g promotion, but also positively affects our private lives.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'in general', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207381370826 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.15992970123 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0579964850615 0.0866891130778 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0597539543058 0.046263068375 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.079086115993 0.0685040099705 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117750439367 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0492091388401 0.0351676179071 140% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81576184592 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0281195079086 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.00351493848858 0.00188951952338 186% => OK
Determiners: 0.079086115993 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0140597539543 0.0209618222197 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0298769771529 0.0139019557991 215% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2944.0 2387.08602151 123% => OK
No of words: 492.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9837398374 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345528455285 0.338922669872 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.160569105691 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121951219512 0.112833075102 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81576184592 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516260162602 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 61.1599748644 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 28.9411764706 20.5533526081 141% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.183923168 48.84282405 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.176470588 120.699889404 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9411764706 20.5533526081 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 53.9411764706 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.25294117647 1.45489161554 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217626298263 0.300154397459 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.125169086909 0.103427244359 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10946191299 0.0752933317313 145% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.500264916219 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155605561991 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875590542075 0.114077575197 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698822054507 0.0781384742642 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.368805946797 0.336927656856 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.102387456132 0.067059652881 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158774349504 0.210909579961 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208410733827 0.0618886996521 34% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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