TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

A bird in the hand is worth more than two in the bush. As this adage goes, it is better to hold onto an opportunity that is certain than having one that is worth more but is not predictable. I agree that if people have the opportunity of getting a secured job, they should take right away rather than wait for a more satisfying job.

To begin with, the rate of unemployment is escalating as people roam around the street searching for jobs. There are tons of graduates from various colleges and universities every year and as a result job opportunity becomes a challenging situation. My own experience is a compelling example of this. In my state, Lagos, there are more than five Pharmacy schools whose graduates fill the available job positions easily and thus making job hunting extremely difficult and highly competitive. When I wanted to start my internship training program in a hospital setting, it was improbable to find any opening nearby. I had to travel for more than 40 miles away from home. At that moment, it was not my ideal job but I did not want to forgo that chance because I was not sure of obtaining a more satisfying job.

Secondly, the potential risk of losing a secured job is less compared to a job that is satisfactory. Some well-established companies and organizations can offer employment benefits that can guarantee the employees the opportunity to be in the organization without being terminated unexpectedly. For instance, my elder brother was offered a job with the Federal Government of Nigeria as a civil servant and coincidentally he got an offer from a small refinery firm. He decided to choose the Federal government job because of its better retirement plans, job security and long-term benefits. The government provided a legal organization that ensures that individuals are not eliminated easily. This was in contrast to the small private firm which was more of a dream job to have but has limited advantages.

In conclusion, I believe that it is better for people to take the opportunity of a secured job which they have in hand than wait for an unforeseen satisfying job because getting a job is highly competitive and challenging.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is highly competitive and challenging.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, incidentally, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87365591398 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97495398228 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4553149859 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.647058824 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351751215175 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116942799717 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133869686003 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259387873708 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997799074689 0.0645574589148 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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